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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 4 - Playing with Fire (12/05/14)
« Reply #30 on: May 12, 2014, 03:16:19 PM »
This is a fun read so far. I can't wait to see what happens next. Mortimer's response to Bella was really funny!

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 4 - Playing with Fire (12/05/14)
« Reply #31 on: May 12, 2014, 05:55:29 PM »
See, that just means Bella and Mortimer like each other. :P The kids are really cute! I love how you've characterized them!

Nancy is definitely in a bit of a bind. This could be quite treacherous...



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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 4 - Playing with Fire (12/05/14)
« Reply #32 on: May 15, 2014, 03:17:00 PM »
Ooh such dark dealing in Sunset Valley.  I love it!  But I hope Nancy wins.

Thanks! I hope it's not too dark  ::) As for Nancy, we'll just have to wait and see...

Oooooooh, scary. I love the characters of Bella, Mortimer, and Malcolm.

They're seriously fun to write and play! Malcolm makes the cutest facial expressions, it's so funny  :)

This is a fun read so far. I can't wait to see what happens next. Mortimer's response to Bella was really funny!

They really don't like each other, do they?  ;) Glad you're enjoying the story. The next chapter is sort of done so I think I'll be able to post it soon.

See, that just means Bella and Mortimer like each other. :P The kids are really cute! I love how you've characterized them!

Nancy is definitely in a bit of a bind. This could be quite treacherous...

Thanks! Yeah, this certainly isn't going well for Nancy. I actually feel a bit bad for her  :(

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 4 - Playing with Fire (12/05/14)
« Reply #33 on: May 16, 2014, 12:08:37 PM »
Ooooooh, I love it when Vita and Nancy face off. I hope she manages to escape from such dodgy dealings (Nancy that is!) The scene with the kids was great, a little sweet before the sour.  :D

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #34 on: May 25, 2014, 08:18:50 AM »
Geoff regarded the stack of files on his desk with no small amount of contempt. Why ever I decided to become a doctor, he thought, it certainly wasn’t for the paperwork.



As if she’d read his thoughts, Morgana knocked on the door.

“Dr Jolina mentioned you’d built up a mountain of papers to sort out. Need a hand?”

“If you’ve nothing else to do, I sure would appreciate it.”

“No problem.” She pulled a chair up to his desk and picked up the first folder.  “Not much going on right now, frankly. Also, I’ve a feeling Jamie was trying to get rid of me.”



“Yes, about that. What’s the problem between you and her?”

Morgana opened her mouth to reply, but was cut off by the sound of Geoff’s text alert. Frowning, he pulled his phone out of his pocket and read the message:

What would you think of us going to France next week? I’m sure Malcolm would love it. –Nancy xx

Geoff had to reread the message several times to allow it to sink in. France? Next week? Right before the vote? By most people’s standards that was spontaneous, and by Nancy’s... a bit weird.  Morgana gave him a quizzical look.



Next week? Bit sudden, isn’t it?, he texted back.

I need a break. Anyway, we’ll be away for Mal’s birthday and you know how much that would mean to him.

Well, we didn’t go away in the summer this year. I’d have to get some time off though, I’m really not sure it‘s feasible.

Just take unpaid leave. It’ll be great. We could stay at the family chateau and everything.

What about your job and everything?

Oh, do stop worrying. It’ll all work out. And just think of how happy Malcolm will be when we tell him. A holiday and a week off school!

Alright then. Let’s do it!

Knew you’d agree in the end xxx


“What was that about?” Morgana asked.

“I’m not entirely sure,” Geoff said, certain that something wasn’t right but unable to work out what it was.

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“Everything sorted?”

Vita smirked. “Completely. Too easy, if you ask me.”



“Brilliant. With any luck they won’t work it out until they’re long gone. I’ll see you later, Vi. How about dinner to celebrate?”

“That sounds divine. I'll meet you at the bistro at six?”

“Perfect. See you then.” Nick hung up and Vita sighed in satisfaction. The sun was shining, it was a warm October day and she’d just found the solution to all their problems. Everything was going exactly according to plan. She sat down on the bench and smiled. It was almost flawless.


Everyone misses you. They won’t admit it but they do.




Almost. Despite her best efforts, she couldn’t stop thinking about Rosie’s message. Bits of it kept playing over and over in her head, and it was driving her mad.

That was your old life, she reasoned, and you’ve moved on. There’s no point dwelling on the past. You’ve never even met Rosie, not really. She only called out of curiosity. So forget about it.



But why wasn’t it that simple?

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Nancy swept into the kitchen, humming the tune to a song Geoff didn’t recognise. She seemed in remarkably high spirits. She grinned and shook her head.

“I haven’t a clue how you managed to talk me into this one, Geoff.”

“How I talked you...” Geoff narrowed his eyes, and then decided that it wasn’t worth pursuing the subject. “Never mind. Should be fun, at any rate. For Malcolm.”

“Yes. And relaxing, as you kept pointing out to me.” She raised an eyebrow, and then kissed him on the cheek. “I’ll go book the plane tickets. Let me know if you need help cooking dinner.”



“I didn’t say anything about it being relaxing,” Geoff started, but Nancy was already gone.

And so it was that the Landgraabs found themselves on a plane bound for France that Saturday morning.


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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #35 on: May 25, 2014, 03:03:31 PM »

Gah! I just found this and it's fabulous! So much drama and mystery, and it's always fun to see more insight into the lives of townies. Totally bookmarked.  ;D

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #36 on: May 25, 2014, 03:56:22 PM »
Fabulous! The writing, the mystery, the screenshots - this is so well done! And I'm generally super picky with stories. Can't wait to see more!





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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #37 on: May 25, 2014, 07:35:17 PM »
What is Nancy up to? I wonder about this...

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #38 on: May 26, 2014, 01:15:44 AM »
...uh-oh. :o

Why do I get the feeling that Geoffrey and Nancy are in serious danger? I have a sneaking suspicion that they weren't talking to who they thought they were talking to over the phone.

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #39 on: May 26, 2014, 02:22:21 AM »
...uh-oh. :o

Why do I get the feeling that Geoffrey and Nancy are in serious danger? I have a sneaking suspicion that they weren't talking to who they thought they were talking to over the phone.

I think you're spot on.  So what is Vita up to while she has Nancy and Geoffrey out of the way?  ::)  I'm thinking nothing good.
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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #40 on: May 26, 2014, 04:16:11 AM »
Amazing

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #41 on: May 26, 2014, 08:42:46 AM »
Ah, the suspense! This is such good writing! I love the drama.  Hehe. ^-^
I wonder what Vita's got up her sleeve... because I know it wasn't Geoff and Nancy texting each other on the phone.

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #42 on: May 26, 2014, 09:41:15 AM »
Ooh. I wonder who the actors playing Geoffrey and Nancy to each other are. I don't think this is going to go well for them.

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #43 on: May 26, 2014, 04:51:03 PM »
Gah! I just found this and it's fabulous! So much drama and mystery, and it's always fun to see more insight into the lives of townies. Totally bookmarked.  ;D
Fabulous! The writing, the mystery, the screenshots - this is so well done! And I'm generally super picky with stories. Can't wait to see more!

Thank you!  ;D

What is Nancy up to? I wonder about this...
...uh-oh. :o

Why do I get the feeling that Geoffrey and Nancy are in serious danger? I have a sneaking suspicion that they weren't talking to who they thought they were talking to over the phone.
I think you're spot on.  So what is Vita up to while she has Nancy and Geoffrey out of the way?  ::)  I'm thinking nothing good.

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Amazing

So glad you like it!  :D

Ah, the suspense! This is such good writing! I love the drama.  Hehe. ^-^
I wonder what Vita's got up her sleeve... because I know it wasn't Geoff and Nancy texting each other on the phone.
Ooh. I wonder who the actors playing Geoffrey and Nancy to each other are. I don't think this is going to go well for them.

What do you mean, it wasn't them? What on earth do you mean?  ::)

The next chapter is written, but I've never tried taking screenshots for a story when travelling so bear with me if this takes a while. I will do my best to get the next chapter posted this week!

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 5 - Making Plans (25/05/14)
« Reply #44 on: May 26, 2014, 09:22:39 PM »
Ok, I don't feel good about this. The Chateu du Landgraab can't be good news...

 

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