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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 2 - Drifting Apart (11/04/14)
« Reply #15 on: April 15, 2014, 09:41:25 AM »
Great Chapter! Im excited for more :)

Thanks! Hopefully I'll have the next chapter finished tomorrow.

Wow, there's so much happening in each chapter, and I concur with everyone's comments on the screenshots.  They are amazing!

Hopefully they're not too confusing ;) And thanks! I'm glad everyone likes them.

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« Reply #16 on: April 15, 2014, 01:02:34 PM »
I'm loving this Jess, and your writing style is great too. Love the soap style approach to all our favourite SV characters  ;D. Great working getting all the screenshots too!



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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 2 - Drifting Apart (11/04/14)
« Reply #17 on: April 15, 2014, 02:56:15 PM »
Oh the drama. :) I hope that Malcolm can learn to stand up to Arlo...and I wonder what nefarious scheme Vita is concocting. This is quite riveting so far!

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article(17/04/14)
« Reply #18 on: April 17, 2014, 04:21:06 PM »
Thanks everyone!



Holly Alto couldn’t really remember a time when her and her parents had got on. She had hazy memories of happy days spent on Sunset’s beaches in the months after they’d moved there, of a time when she wasn’t expected to be a certain way. Now, she felt she spent most of her life either trying to stay away from them and what they did or trying to get them to appreciate her for who she was. And it wasn’t easy. So, she found herself once again sitting in her classroom half an hour early, reading a book just to avoid them that morning. Little did she know that her world was about to change forever.

“Is this Room B?”

She glanced up, to see a girl she’d never met standing in the doorway.



“Er, yeah. Why?”

“Awesome.” She walked into the classroom and glanced around, taking it all in. “I’m Lara. I’m supposed to be starting here today?”

“Oh! Right. You’re one of the Riverview students?”

“That’s it. Dallas and Mary are probably just coming.” She made a face. “I’d hoped they’d changed their minds about coming here but no such luck. Oh well.” She dropped her bag onto Holly’s desk. “Mind if I sit here?”



“Sure. Well, that’s kinda someone else’s seat, but I’m sure it's fine.”

“Sounds good. What’s your name, then?”

“Me? I’m Holly.”

“You live round here?”

“Yeah. Most of us do, but...”

“This place is so small! Like, OMG. It’s so weird.”

The voice came from the corridor outside. The door swung open and two people, who Holly assumed were Dallas and Mary, sauntered in. Mary looked at Lara and sneered.



“What’re you doing here, farm girl?”

“Farm girl? Wow Mary, great imagination you’ve got there. And I moved, like you. Remember?”

“Urgh. So I’ve still got to deal with you?”

“Don’t worry. The feeling’s mutual.”

Mary turned to Holly. “I’m MaryKay Shallow. But you can call me Mary. Or MK. Who’re you?”



“I’m Holly.”

“No way. Holly Alto?”

Holly gulped. “Err, well, y’know...”

“Oh my gosh! This is so cool! So, you’re like, super rich, right?”

“Well, um...”

“We are going to be such good friends! So how big is your house?”

“Leave her alone, Mary,” said Lara. “She obviously doesn’t want to talk about it.”

“Well, you’re obviously trying to be nice to her because you want some of her money! Where on earth did you get that uniform? Looks like it’s from a bin or something.”

“Mary, shut up,” Dallas drawled. He stuck his hand out to Holly. “Dallas Shallow. Pleasure to meet you.” Holly shook it gingerly.



“You too.”



 “Don’t trust either of them,” Lara said over lunch. “They’re both awful. Tom’s a right suck-up and Mary... well, you saw her this morning, Holly.” She paused. “I don’t mean to be rude or anything, but are you actually really rich?”

“Yeah. Dad made a fortune from property development and Mum’s the mayor.  I couldn’t care less about it all, though.” Her tone was fairly light but there was an edge to it.

Bebe chewed her sandwich thoughtfully. “So, Lara, what about you? Everyone knows each other round here. What’s your life like?”

“Me? There’s not much to say. I live on a farm, but Mary’s inspired nickname could have told you that, with my parents, Gran, Granddad, my brother Ron and my aunt Rosie. Huge family, right? I like horse riding. I’m like, one eighth Italian or something? That’s me, pretty much.”

There was something strange about Lara, but Holly couldn’t think what it was.



“Horse riding? That’s so cool. Do you like, compete?”

“Yeah! I won a trophy back in July.”

“Wow.”

“Have you met the Lobos twins yet? They’re from my old school too. They’re adorable, but don’t tell them I said that. Anita and Carlotta, their names are.”

Where did Holly know her from?

Bebe looked over at her. “You okay? You don't look that great.”

Holly shook her head. “Fine. It’s nothing.”



When Geoff went down to the kitchen that Saturday morning, he found Nancy, staring at the newspaper and gripping her mug of coffee so hard it was a miracle it didn’t shatter.

“Nancy? What’s wrong?”

She just nudged the newspaper towards him slightly. Geoff sat down next to her and read the article covering the front page.

IS IT ALL CHANGE FOR SUNSET?
Following a speech made to local reporters yesterday, the Sunset Valley Times can reveal that Mayor Alto has unveiled plans for a town consultation to be held on long-standing plans for a mass-modernisation project. The consultation, ending with a vote all residents of the town would be invited to participate in, marks a bold shift in policy towards the idea of development in Sunset...


The article then went on to elaborate on how he whole process would be fair and transparent, giving people the change to have their say in the future of Sunset. Nancy seemed to be in complete disbelief. Geoff put an arm around her shoulders gently.

“The thing is,” she said quietly, “They can’t do this unless I agree to it. I’ve got the deeds to almost half the land round here. Vita can’t force me to sell.”

Geoff almost laughed with relief. “Thank goodness for that. So, it's all fine then?”



“It’s not that simple. Vita’s already done a pretty good job of painting me as manipulative and controlling. If I don’t agree to go ahead with this I’ll never be able to show my face in public again.” She pushed Geoff’s arm away, gritting her teeth.

“But... what if the Altos win?”

“Then that’s what people want. And if I try and stop it they’ll just hate me for it.”

“We can’t just do nothing!”

“I never said that. We just have to stop them winning the vote. Somehow.”She stood up, and suddenly seemed full of determination. “A full on campaign is what needs to happen. The Altos and their minions have a head start, but I’m sure I can sort something out. Posters, flyers, and I’ll see if I can’t get something in the paper. Let me know if you think of anything else. I’ll be in my study.” She pulled her phone out, dialled a number and strode off. Geoff picked up the paper again, frowning.



Thornton was properly panicking about this dinner party. Morgana wasn’t sure what he had to worry about – after all, he knew the Altos quite well – but evidently there was a lot resting on this event in regards to his career that she was unaware off. When the doorbell rang he almost jumped out of his chair.

“Right. Remember what I said. Laugh even if it’s not funny, smile, don’t say anything unless it’s intelligent or complimentary.” Morgana wasn’t quite sure if he was talking to her or himself. She went over to the door and opened it slowly.

“Thornton!” Vita walked right past her and shook Thornton’s hand. “How nice to see you! It’s been far too long. Holly, dear, come say hello.”



Holly, who had been half hiding behind Nick, nodded her head awkwardly. “Hi Mr Wolff.” Vita nudged her and she attempted a smile. “Err, how are you?”

“Maybe we could leave the small talk,” Nick said, pushing past the three of them into the house. “We are here for business, after all.”

“But dinner as well, of course,” Vita cut in smoothly. The two of them strode over to the sofas at the far off the room, Thornton hurrying to catch up with them.



Dinner was an unpleasant affair, to say the least. Vita dominated the conversation, with Thornton offering the occasional “oh yes” and “you’re quite right”. Morgana looked over at Holly, who was picking at her meal and avoiding making eye contact with any of them. She wondered what was wrong. Vita glanced over at Holly and rolled her eyes.

“Oh for goodness sake, would you stop being so silly? It’s already a steak, isn’t it? So you won’t go saving any cows by not eating it. You’re embarrassing us.”

“It doesn’t really work like that,” Holly mumbled. Vita gave her a pointed look.

“Oh, don’t worry,” Morgana cut in, only just restraining herself from glaring at Vita. “I had no idea you were a vegetarian, Holly, I’m so sorry. Is there anything else I could get you? Here, have some more salad.”

“Oh, don’t worry. It doesn’t matter,” said Holly, apologetically. She cut off a bit of her steak and chewed it, but she couldn’t quite hide the grimace that crossed her face.

“There, see?” Vita said sweetly. “It’s not so bad.”



 “She is evil, that woman. If she’d spoken to Holly like that again that night I would have done something very stupid, I can tell you. And I wouldn’t have regretted it, either.” The two of them were sat in the hospital cafeteria after an un-eventful night shift, drinking coffee as Morgana related the events of the previous night to Geoff. He sighed heavily and pinched the bridge of his nose.

“Poor Holly. I’ve never seen her relax when she’s near her parents. As for Vita, she’s possibly the most ambitious person I’ve ever met, and will relentlessly destroy anything that stands in her way. What her end goal is, I don’t know.”

“World domination?” Morgana said it with a smirk, but Geoff just stared into his coffee cup.

“You know what? I wouldn’t be surprised.”



Tell him, a small voice in her head said, but she pushed it away.

“What’s Nancy plan to do about all this then?”

“Run a campaign. Don’t get me wrong, her dedication is... admirable, but she’s become absolutely obsessed with the whole thing. If I didn’t know her better I’d say she was scared.”

“Of the Altos?”

“More of what they represent. Change.”

Not the most exciting chapter, I know, but I needed to write it. The action should pick up a bit now. For anyone who doesn't know much about Riverview townies, MaryKay, Dallas and the Lobos twins are all EA Sims but I've invented Lara. Her and her family will be quite important later on  ;) Since it's Easter this weekend I'm not sure how much writing I'll be able to do, so bear with me. Thanks for reading!  ;D


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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #20 on: April 17, 2014, 06:28:40 PM »
I really love this story! It's like a soap opera with all these characters I already know.

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« Reply #21 on: April 18, 2014, 12:00:15 PM »
Ooh, the plot thickens! I wonder what the Altos are up too? 



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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #22 on: April 19, 2014, 04:57:05 AM »
Actually, I found the chapter quite involving.

Oh, good. I was worried it was a bit dull  :)

I really love this story! It's like a soap opera with all these characters I already know.

Thanks! Yeah, I've always loved the SV townies and imagined what their lives might be like so I thought 'hey, I could write a story about them!' Glad you're enjoying it so far.

Ooh, the plot thickens! I wonder what the Altos are up too? 

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #23 on: April 25, 2014, 06:27:33 PM »
Hi, sorry this next chapter is taking ages. I promise I'll try and finish it this weekend  :-[

Quick question - which is better, short chapters (<1000 words) posted a couple of times a week, or longer chapters (>1000 words) posted every week or every other week? All feedback appreciated  :)


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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #25 on: April 25, 2014, 07:28:59 PM »
In the end, it depends on what you like better, but shorter chapters could allow you to have one chapter focus on one thing. It's organized and stuff.

I don't know if I commented yet or not, but I really like this story. I'm a huge sucker for giving extended stories to townies.
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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #26 on: April 29, 2014, 11:54:52 AM »
Short and frequent is best for me. I read in between other tasks.
In the end, it depends on what you like better, but shorter chapters could allow you to have one chapter focus on one thing. It's organized and stuff.

I don't know if I commented yet or not, but I really like this story. I'm a huge sucker for giving extended stories to townies.

Thanks! Yeah, I think short works better. With any luck I'll be able to post Chapter 4 tomorrow  :)

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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 3 - The Article (17/04/14)
« Reply #27 on: May 12, 2014, 07:06:55 AM »
This is so late, sorry  :-[ The next chapter shouldn't take nearly so long.




Remember me? From the prologue? I didn’t set out to start narrating this story, but I suppose someone’s got to.

So, where were we? Ah, yes.

It was late September, and the leaves were beginning to drift off the trees. It was well and truly Autumn now, and the streets were mostly empty. Everything seemed to be as it should, and yet there was something different, something about the way that people weren’t quite meeting each other’s eyes, that wasn’t at all like the Sunset I knew.

It was strange, I’ll tell you that. No-one knew what was going to happen. Change... what even was change? It was just an abstract concept. People imagined it would mean more people, maybe some more facilities, even a train station. But nobody knew what Nick and Vita really had in mind, except the few they thought they could trust. Which, funnily enough, included me.

I’ll let you find all of that out in due course.

It was a dangerous situation. One the one side, there were the Altos, who were playing with fire. Vita had made it her business to find out everything there was to know about everyone in Sunset, and yet she was the one who had most to lose if anyone took the time to look into her past. Meanwhile, Nick had climbed the ranks of Gunther’s corporate empire with a combination of good business deals, lavish dinner parties and fraud, just to ensure that Gunther remained on his side. Nobody associated him with anything dubious, let alone illegal.

Then, on the other side, you had Nancy. From what I can gather she was simultaneously managing Landgraab Industries, all but running Gothic Finance and performing about five other jobs in the two corporations. Maybe we were once friends. It was always difficult to tell with her. Most people wrote her off as a snob, someone who scorned the company of ‘regular folk’, thinking they were below her. She was happy to let that perception persist, even going so far as to play the part of the snooty businesswoman who valued things on their price tag.  I think she began to believe it herself. I knew better, and so did the handful of people who grew up in Sunset, who had known her before the Altos, before... everything, but they chose to ignore what was staring them in the face. People do that a lot. It’s dangerous.

So, who am I? I don’t think you need to know that yet. I haven’t been in the story a whole lot yet, and I hadn’t been very involved in events at this point. I was there though, watching, waiting. Trying to decide what to do.

Shall we carry on?

***



“He’s called Mandrake,” Bella said, letting the little snake wind around her wrist. “He’s a python. I had to nag Dad for ages. I wanted a poisonous one but he said no.”

“I wonder why,” said Malcolm, who was shying away from Mandrake.

“He can’t hurt you! Okay, yeah, he does bite, but it’s not dangerous or anything. Maybe I’ll dare you to hold him later.” When she saw his face she laughed. “Fine, fine. But we’ll have to play truth or dare. It’s a sleepover thing, we can’t not do it.” She put Mandrake back in the tank, patting his head. “So cute.”

“Cute?”

Mortimer rolled his eyes. “Just a lizard. What’s the big deal? Anyone got any chocolate? I’m starving.”

“I brought like a million bars. Help yourself.”

“Did you guys do the art project yet?” Malcolm piped up.

“Yeah. I did a painting of a graveyard.”

“A graveyard?”

“Yeah.” Her face turned serious. “It’s a reflection on the inevitability of death and the ultimate futility of existence.”

“Oh. I drew a house with some people.”

“Representing...?”

Malcolm paused. “A house. With people in it.”

***



“Ok, Morty. Truth or dare?” asked Bella, later that evening.

“Dare,”

“Hmm. Okay. Go 'borrow' Mike’s laptop and bring it back here.”

“Alright then.” He left, and returned a minute later with a laptop under his arm.

“How did you...?”

“Told him I’d been dared, and that if he lent me this thing you’d be really annoyed you couldn’t outwit me.” Bella scowled, and Mortimer laughed. “In. Your. Face. Truth or dare?”

“Err, truth?”

“Do you fancy me?”

Malcolm bit his lip. “That’s silly.”

“It’s a valid question. So answer it.”

Bella smiled wryly. “Should I be tactful or blunt?”

“Oh, be blunt.”

“Aliens will come to earth enquiring about holiday homes and Vita Alto will buy a unicorn before I ever even slightly like you even a little bit.”

“Ouch,” said Mortimer. “Well, that’s good. If I’d discovered you fancied me I’d probably have to move to Australia or something. Change my name out of shame.”

“Well, everyone would still know who you were. No-one can forget your extreme ugliness.”

“I am actually very attractive, thanks. Especially compared to you.”

“Guys!” shouted Malcolm. “Stop!”

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Vita stared at her phone in disbelief, desperately hoping that this was some sort of mistake. But the number was unmistakable. She knew exactly who this was from. Taking a deep breath, she pressed play and raised the phone to her ear. She didn't notice Holly standing behind her.



“Oh! Umm, I wasn’t really expecting to get through. This is Rosie speaking. Is that Via? I hope it’s you. Obviously I can’t check, ‘cause, y’know, I’m just leaving a message. I’ve completely forgotten how I was going to say this. You must think I’m really weird now. I’m just nervous, promise. Anyway, well, I was thinking, if you’re not too busy, sometime, we could meet up someplace? Chat about stuff? I don’t know. Call back, sometime, please? Everyone misses you. They won’t admit it but they do. Oh! Martha’s home. Gotta go, bye!”  Vita could hear Rosie fumbling with the phone, and then the line went dead.

***



“So, you wanted to talk to us?”

Nancy leant forward slightly. “Yes. You’ve been rather vague about this, Nick. What will happen if, by some fluke, you win this thing?”

He smirked. “And you desperately needed to find this out on a Saturday afternoon?”

“Seemed as good as any other time.” She raised an eyebrow. “Don’t patronise me. You’ve no hope of convincing me to help you, so you may as well just give me the plain facts.”

Nick turned to Vita, who had been bizarrely quiet up to that point, and hadn’t so much as glanced in their direction. 

“What do you think?”

“Huh? Oh, right. Do whatever you think best.” She seemed lost in thought.



“Alright then.” He raised an eyebrow, then looked back over at Nancy. “If you win the vote, everything carries on as normal. You keep the land, Sunset stays the same. With me?”

“Obviously. I know all that. What if you win?”

“Then all the deeds you own in Sunset get transferred to us.”

“But what will you do with them? That’s what I don’t know.”

“If you didn’t know, why did you agree...?” He left the question hanging.

“To save face. You know that. You left me with no choice, and funnily enough I’m not overly thrilled about that.”

Nick shook his head in amusement. “You know what we’ll do with them.”

“I’ve an idea. Mind confirming it for me?”

“Alright. Urbanisation. Don’t you think Sunset would make quite the city?”

“City?” Nancy stared at him in shock. “Are you... what?”

“Problem? Let’s face it, this town is a relic. Your ideas of ‘tradition’ or whatever just don’t work, do they?”

“And what gives you the right to just waltz in here and start taking over?”



“Would you stop?” said Vita, who seemed far less distracted than before. “Nancy, face it, your time’s up. Nobody wants you ‘in charge’ any more. You’re clinging on to something that isn’t yours. And everyone’s had enough. Even the Goths. What more proof do you need that, like it or not, Sunset Valley’s as good as ours?”

“Well, let’s see who actually wins,” said Nancy, frostily.



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« Reply #28 on: May 12, 2014, 07:34:26 AM »
Ooh such dark dealing in Sunset Valley.  I love it!  But I hope Nancy wins.
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Re: Dreams of Sunset: Chapter 4 - Playing with Fire (12/05/14)
« Reply #29 on: May 12, 2014, 11:29:08 AM »
Oooooooh, scary. I love the characters of Bella, Mortimer, and Malcolm.