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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #135 on: October 21, 2012, 05:46:18 PM »
CLIFFFHANGGEER!?!!?! That was such an amazing couple of updates I want to read more and more.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #136 on: October 21, 2012, 05:48:13 PM »
CLIFFFHANGGEER!?!!?! That was such an amazing couple of updates I want to read more and more.
Thanks! I'm hoping to have the next update tomorrow, I have all the screenshots for the ending, I just need to write it.



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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #137 on: October 22, 2012, 04:48:09 PM »
Awesome updates! Your story is really a thriller!
The outside is quiet, but the inside is on full blast.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #138 on: October 22, 2012, 04:57:14 PM »
Awesome updates! Your story is really a thriller!
Thanks, Kaye! :)

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #139 on: October 22, 2012, 07:11:21 PM »
Wow, I didn't expect that! So Oma isn't really the "good guy" in all of this, is she? And it seems Kali isn't entirely bad, either... very interesting twist!

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #140 on: October 22, 2012, 07:26:45 PM »
Wow, I didn't expect that! So Oma isn't really the "good guy" in all of this, is she? And it seems Kali isn't entirely bad, either... very interesting twist!
Thanks Apples! And the twist aren't over yet. I'll try and get an update tomorrow, real life has just been really busy. Sorry, guys.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #141 on: October 22, 2012, 08:17:31 PM »
I'm in a writing mood, so here's the next log. Enjoy!

Log 22
   For a moment, I can't breath. Even though I'm outside, I feel like everything is too close, trying to drown me. "Why?" I stutter. "Because, I.. I was jealous." I look at her in disbelief and mimic what she just said.

   "Halie, I was jealous so I killed your father because I'm a bitter woman who likes torturing people." As I speak, Kali grows angrier and angrier. "You brat! You have no idea how hard my life was! How hard I had to work!' "No," I cut her off. "YOU, don't know how hard MY life was. Not only did I lose my father, I lost my mother. I lost my childhood. How can that compare to your sister stealing your boyfriend? It can't, Kali." She lunges towards me and I bounce back and out my hands up.

   "Don't. Speak. To. Me. Like. That." She growled.

   I was done with Kali, I was done with her games and her life. I wanted her out of my life so I could go back to living, I wanted the time we spent in the school back, I wanted my life back. "Hailey, we are done. It is time for you to disappear." I react before she can finish her sentence, lunging out to her. She hits back, and the fight starts.

I get a tight hold on her, "I am not done. and I will not disappear." She bends over, breathing hard. As I stand triumphantly. "You can never win." She cries. "But I did." I reply. I run down the stairs, and start to run. I don't know where I am or where I'm going, I just don't want Kali there. Suddenly, the world freezes, and my legs refuse to move. I can't see Kali, but I know she's there. Somewhere. Her voice booms from somewhere. Icy cold. "You thought you won, how sweet. You can run all you want, I will always find you." And, the world becomes hazy. Till I fall, the last thing I see is a dandelion, trying to grow beneath the pressure. What I failed at.

 
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   It's cold, my arms are freezing and I can't feel my fingers. There is an explanation, my coat is gone.

   The ground is hard underneath my head. My feet are cold too, my shoes are gone and my jeans are ripped. Unsteadily, I get to my feet. Pushing off the ground.

Only once I'm standing do I see her.

Her skin is inhumanly white, paler then before. Her clothes are ripped, her coat gone.

The only color is her blood red lips. We stand there for a minute, daring the other to move. To break some promise. She moves first.

She takes slow, insetting steps towards me. Her balance is odd, she seems to teeter with each step. She's inches in front of me when I move. I step backwards and do what I do best. Run. 
   The pavement is hot under my feet, and she chases behind me. Glide is more the word, as her feet don't seem to ever touch the ground. I wonder what the rest of the world sees. DO they see me being chased by Kali, and call the police? Or do they only see a strange girl running with her clothes ripped and barefoot and still call the police?

Eventually, I don't hear anyone behind me, but I keep running. I need to get to Jill's. I need to fix this. Never have a been so determined in my life to fix this.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #142 on: October 22, 2012, 09:13:04 PM »
Very dramatic and suspenseful update, Sadie!  I loved the way she woke up in different clothes.
 
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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #143 on: October 22, 2012, 09:16:19 PM »
Very dramatic and suspenseful update, Sadie!  I loved the way she woke up in different clothes.
Thank you, Schip!

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #144 on: October 24, 2012, 06:28:43 AM »
Very exciting update! I can't wait for more. :D

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #145 on: October 24, 2012, 03:31:09 PM »
Very exciting update! I can't wait for more. :D
Thanks, Louise! I'll try and update soon, depending on how busy I am.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #146 on: October 28, 2012, 11:08:01 AM »
Your writing always leaves use hanging! I mean that in a good way  ;).

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #147 on: October 28, 2012, 11:19:24 AM »
Your writing always leaves use hanging! I mean that in a good way  ;).
Thanks, Spork. I'm going to try to write the next Log in a moment, but I've had a bit of writers block, so I've been trying to get rid of it. Soooo, we'll see what happens.

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #148 on: October 29, 2012, 05:36:20 PM »
Aw, I'm sorry about your writer's block. :( We'll wait happily for the next log. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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Re: In The Dark-Newest Log-Kali's Heartbreak
« Reply #149 on: October 29, 2012, 08:45:31 PM »
Aw, I'm sorry about your writer's block. :( We'll wait happily for the next log. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Thanks. I think I'm finally coming out of it, I want to write more now so that's a good sign.

 

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